JBAR Ft. Soulja Boy Tell 'Em -"Daze"
Hope you know your beat's famous man. Good work
Yea i know :] i made it they found it and made a song :]
Too Unoriginal, but Good Potential
You're better than a lot of independent artists. However, you used the same exact beat, vocal pattern, and nearly the same tempo as "I Like It" by Enrique Iglesias. You have potential, but you need to work more on originality. Be more creative with your lyrics, and don't be an autotune junkie please. Also, the beat is pretty repetitive. Don't be afraid to switch chords and throw some curve balls on those transitions! I'm not trying to be harsh, just to help. Don't lose that fire. :)
Thanks for the review. for the record the only stuff i put on here that i dont think is like super great. also I cant sing wortha damn which is why i autotune. i just sing on tracks for fun. thaanks
omg omg omg....
hey... its that kid that added vocals to your "travis' song"...
so anyways... i tried to make a final copy, but never got around to getting the time together for it.. school and all.
i don't think my voice quite.. fit it perfectly either.
anyways... i might give this one a shot. its not as... metallic, would you say?
as much as i love hard rock, my voice just isn't for it.
anyways.. ill keep you posted if i decide to go for it. this one i might be able to cover a little better.
you guys are awesome. and i might add another vocalist from around my area too if he feels up to it. keep on rockin!!!
Felt I had to return the favor after that great review :)
I'm surprised this song doesn't have more of them!
Ok, first things first:
Your piano, even if a little repetitive, is very beautiful.
All the chords flow nicely, and the softness of the song is perfect.
I would advise cutting down a little on the high "C, G, C, G, C, G" melody.
Instead of using it for 16 measures at a time, maybe cut it down to a 4-8 measure bridge from here to there.
From 1:38 to 1:45.... that's what you need. Awesome fills like that, that aren't quite the melody but close enough that it still sounds beautiful.
Other then that, your piano is near-perfect.
As far as vocals go, I can tell you don't use much of your abs. Don't be shy to sing a little louder sometimes. Using your abs (even just as much as your full talking voice) will both improve your pitch control and your range, as well as stabilize your voice so it's not so shaky. :) I know it's hard, especially when you know someone might hear you when you don't want them to, but you just gotta get past that mindset and sing like nobody's listening. Practice makes perfect.
The soft voice you use is good for an intro. But as for the rest of the song...
A perfect example is 1:22 to 1:27. That's the kind of voice I'd like to hear a bit more. Not for the whole song, but more often then what it is now.
You remind me a lot of either Relient K or Snow Patrol. I can't quite put my tongue on it, but you remind me a lot of something...
If you used your abs and tried to control your voice a bit more, I'm sure the results would be great. Other then that, and the repetitive melody, I have nothing else to say. :)
Overall, you did great on this song so far. Composing is just half, the other is emotion and enthusiasm for your music. Keep it up! :)
9/10 and 5/5.
Thanks a lot. I appreciate your time! I'm glad you reviewed. I was kinda hoping you would. You're very good sir. Keep it up and thanks for the tips!!
Great beat, but makes me feel guilty... :P
This beat's amazing. I've always been a fan of hardstyle.
But around 0:27, when you looped "You - Ruined - My - Life" over and over, it sounded a lot like "Ian - Ruined - My - Life" to me. :P
And the fact that my name's Ian makes me feel more awkward then a straight guy at a gay bar. Just sayin. Don't stop the music, s'all good.
But what happens in Cancún STAYS in Cancún, dammit!!!
thanks for the review
The kick is delicious.
I love the effects, the step-sequencing, and just the overall feel of this song.
However, when the new kick comes in around 0:40, I feel it could be a little deeper, like when it comes in again at 1:12. However, excellent mixing and flow :)
I hope to hear a lot more from you in the future. Keep it up!
actually both those kicks are 2 completely different kicks =P.
with the bass i had going making it stronger would have made it sound crackled, so finding that "perfect volume" was what i was going for, but it would be great to have it stronger =]
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